Tag: Final Draft

CS A5: Final edit of essay – Image in the age of entanglement

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Final version of extended essay:

31/08/20 CS A5-image-in-the-age-of-entanglement-sarah-jane-field-512666-offlineDownload

Earlier version:

13/08/20 CS A5 Image in the age of entanglement Sarah-Jane Field 512666 – offline

Please note, I have requested permission from relevant artists to publish their images online. If artists have not replied, the online version of the essay has blank spaces where an image should be but captions are included. OCA students/staff are welcome to email me for an offline copy showing all images. I will update this PDF if other artists give permission before the deadline for making changes arrives.

Please see the initial submission for OCA reflection.

In addition to the PDF, I will include the following in the final submission for assessment.

  • Thanks to the many proof-readers (OCA and non OCA) and my highly educated friend Mariana for checking the citation style.
  • Thanks to the three scientists who read through earlier drafts, Professor Peter Doel – University College London, Professor Alan Woodward – University of Surrey, and a quantum mechanics student who prefers to remain anonymous.
  • Thanks to artist Rowan Lear, who is far more knowledgeable about Karen Barad and agential realism than I am, for reading through excerpts I was unsure about and clarifying for me.

CS: A5 Edits following tutor feedback

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Following the chat I had with Matt a couple of week’s ago and his feedback, I have finally managed to get the word count down – I suspect it is a bit less than stated on the cover now and will recount before assessment (I counted over the weekend but cut more this morning.)

I have emphasised the link between poststructuralism and the science philosophy/science using Barad’s interpretation far more than before, not so much due to Matt’s response – in fact, he told me not to undermine my argument after I attempted to accommodate notes made by two quantum scientists, both of whom said, but you can’t feel quantum fluctuations. It was that which made me grit my teeth (yes, I am aware!) and look through Barad’s work again and then to underscore the links between PS and the science.

Despite my frustrations, I am grateful to the scientists as their comments resulted in a more focused essay, I think, and I need to add thanks to them on the document.

I need to write to artists included and request permission to show their images on the blog version of the essay.

Introduction still isn’t quite right and I need to look at it again.

Appendix One could probably do with being heavily edited or even cut altogether now as I address the topic in the essay more.

At this point, finally, if any peers do read this yet again, I am now ready to address proofing/corrections if you notice them. It will be proofed by someone external in any case before the assessment deadline and has been through Grammarly. I do hope to God I have picked up the really daft mistakes/typos now and that everyone’s name is right.

CS A5 Image in the age of entanglement – July27th