CS A4: Tutor feedback

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Written feedback and learning points in orange

A well-written, constructed and ambitious essay. The questions you are asking are (too?) huge (yes too huge but see end of report for rationale for sticking with it) and you offer a genuine attempt to answer some of these difficult and pressing questions about the nature of perception and the difficulties of the shifting photographic (and beyond) landscape.

The specific examples of art work that you give to try to unpick your ideas are really useful for the reader and help to emphasis your philosophical points. I, for one, would have enjoyed more of these to help me get to grips with some of these ideas! I do plan to add more, including more of my own – the work is in development. There are some minor grammatical and spelling errors that I have circled that are easy to remedy. Thanks

I am left with a couple of critical points that you might like to address in your final draft, if you think appropriate.

 1 I know that you are specifically addressing photography (and at times the moving image) in the context of this essay but on a couple of occasions when reading through (I have scribbled comments in the margins if you can read my writing!) I felt that you were distancing photography from other modes of production that do not suffer from the same Cartesian problems (performance art, participatory art practice?). This is problematic because you are, in part, discussing huge problems, ideas and world views that if critiqued solely (or predominantly, at least) through the photographic lens, can lead to a falsely narrow view – the very thing that you are suggesting is problematic with the way that we (in the West) think about and represent the world. This is a good point – and I will find a way to underline the discussion could apply to various ‘isolated objects – i.e. disciplines’ within the arts. And, of course, to politics, academia, and economics – to a general mindset in the West. But, that due to my course, I am looking through the lens of photography (of the academic art sort), which as it happens, is particularly guilty of the charges laid. There is probably too much to say about the split in western consciousness (logic vs ‘feeling’) – rationalised in the Cartesian era, and eventually expressed in photography, hence the inclusion of Cassandra as a figure – so maybe worth finding a way. Photography (of the academic art type) often seems incredibly myopic. And whatever flaws it has in relation, are compounded by what comes across as a fragile ego and the subsequent manifestation of that, a horrible superiority complex – which leads to work that claims to be about universal issues but often seems about little more than its own insecurities.  

It may be that you haven’t emphasised your reasons for concentrating on photography in the essay (because you are studying on a photography course? See above). As well as continuing to be the most dominant form of representation for consumers, the photographic community all too often alienates itself from other modes of representation. This is not, unfortunately, as a way of creating an objective distance to help the debate, rather as a way of protecting itself from intruders as well as for commercial reasons (see above). Interestingly, the very people who seek to critique the medium from the inside (Hilliard, Arnett et al.), arguably do the opposite; the further alienate photography from a wider discourse?

 2 I say the following reservedly, wanting to avoid a panicked inclusion of unnecessary material, but: You have done well to avoid bogging yourself down with too much of a description of quantum theory but I wonder if there is room for a little more help for the uninitiated reader? I suspect a few tweaks here and there could shift this impression. There is also a very good bit from Barad where she stresses classical and quantum models do not describe two different worlds. They describe the same world but from different points of view/perspectives. I already identified I should probably make sure that’s in there somewhere.

 3 Does your conclusion adequately sum up your argument? Do you need to refer more to quantum theory here? Yes, I should. Or will this confuse rather than illuminate?

I agree with comments made on the document by hand that the conclusion needs to be longer. I will also delete the bits you say you got lost in – I have clearly been unable to describe myself properly there and am looking for areas to cut: the bits I can’t explain properly for lack of thorough understanding is probably a good place to start.

The main ‘flaw’ with the essay is that it is too big a subject to be dealt with in 5000+/- words. However, the issue is so pressing, so unbelievably important that the disadvantages of sticking with it are outweighed by the need. The hubris of the ‘single-authored’ hero mentality that dominates our culture has completely destroyed our habitat. Barad’s theory (which has been so important to New Materialism – a term I purposely didn’t mention in the essay as there were enough new words and categories to contend with) underpins a way of thinking that promotes the rejection of human (white/male/western) exceptionalism. Today, that is so pressing – and it cannot be stressed enough. As I write it, that mentality is being played out in the worst way possible. Perhaps my essay will not change many minds, but it will influence my circle of people and I have already seen some of these ideas have an impact on others. It’s vital that we all find small ways to shift the destructive mindset we Westerners have assumed is natural and fixed for too long.

CS A4: sections that have been cut

I want to record sections that I cut at the moment, in case I feel they need to be re-inserted in favour of other sections. (Some may already have been re-inserted or moved to different sections)

Two of these cut bits seem particularly relevant and have an impact on my BOW. Points 10 and 11 were really difficult to edit out and as I read through them now, I wonder if there is a way of reintroducing them. Orange needs to go back in some way:

  1. ‘Following the uptake of the term ‘intra-action’ by Haraway (2008: 17, with the concept underpinning her account of companion species) the term has obtained widespread currency in perspectives influenced by feminist STS (e.g. Latimer and Miele, 2013; Puig de la Bellacasa, 2011). Yet, as Haraway herself suggests, use of Barad’s terminology does not necessarily mean an ethical engagement with the ‘radical change Barad’s analysis demands’ (Hollins, 2015: 162, n.1).
  2. ‘Photographers’ practice is hostile to ideology. Ideology ….insist[s] on a single viewpoint thought to be perfect. Flusser 415
  3. Faced with Bloomberg and Chanarin’s Shirley Images, appropriated Kodak cards which appear at the beginning of The Image of Whiteness, edited by Daniel C. Blight, demonstrating ‘perfect exposure’ for white skin we should be alarmed. When we witness the capitalised ‘NORMAL’, we should be nothing less than horrified by its ignorance of that global leftover, but evidently much-continued colonialized mind-set. Kember and Zylinska’s urge us to see the ontology of photography as predominantly that of ‘becoming’ – an intra-active process of existence. The Shirley Images, as such, were not merely representative of a racist world, but rather a re-enforcer of it, a definer of ‘normality’. The performative action, not only of taking the image, but of disseminating it as some form of (most likely unconscious) propaganda to potential clients makes Kodak a collaborator of the dominant white, male ideological machine.
    In her essays Unlearning Decisive Moments of Photography Azoulay is asking us to make the connections between entangled actions elsewhere in time as well as place.
    While Modernism may have been the ‘relentless pursuit of a better future’ (Harvey, 1990), we should not only ask, better for who, but also look at the entangled production of ideas, goods and apparatus’ which have resulted in the current state of reality. A reality in which people with more melanin in their skin than Shirley get are being banished from their homes. Aside from its likely improbability, representationalism distances us from responsibility and a willingness or even an ability to conceive of alternative realities.

  4. ‘Realness’ we are reminded, does not imply ‘thingness’. (2007: 56)
  5. Summary of Chapter 1  Barad asks us to query long-assumed conceptual definitions, referencing quantum-based philosophy which potentially dissolves and continually re-configures past, current and future boundaries. Indeterminism exists at the heart of reality. We are asked to consider how, why and where we cut out the fabric of reality to create it? Gilles Deleuze’s writing similarly rejects traditional cuts that end in the separation of realms, and promotes the idea that everything in reality is in continual flux – the world is always ‘becoming’ – an intra-active dance of Virtual entities emerging and disappearing. And, as with Barad, there is a continual, lively, responsive relationship between discursive and material objects that form our reality. In Barad’s agential realism, meaning arises out of material and discursive practices[1], not as something imposed upon reality but rather from within and of it. It is emergent. For Deleuze too, there is no Utopian plane waiting to be represented. (We might trace this discussion back to Aristotle and the question of Forms – non-earthly perfect things that exist elsewhere, and reality – that which we actually live with).  However, before addressing representationalism, entanglement and diffraction will be introduced.
  6. First intro The January 2020 edition of Vogue Italia contained no photography. We were told this temporary rejection of the photograph demonstrated Vogue Italia’s commitment to the environmental movement. Considering the industry’s track record, which includes ominous links to slavery, a difficult relationship with women’s bodies and a cutthroat career path satirically expressed in The Devil Wears Prada (Weisberger, 2003), suggests being suspicious of their motivation is forgivable. The fashion industry is viewed by many as an ecological outlaw: the manufacture of synthetic fabrics which don’t decompose but instead turn to plastic waste along with elaborate advertising shoots requiring sizeable teams of people and objects travelling by air across the planet make it easy to see why. Entanglement between dubious business practices, social injustice, impossibly cheap must-have dresses and glossy magazine pages cannot be denied. But as photographers, we may shudder with alarm to see our medium side-lined, even if for only one issue, but we may also understand Vogue Italia’s intentions and its desire to be, or simply be seen, as responsible and responsive. If nothing else, it makes perfect marketing sense.This essay, however, is not about the fashion industry. Rather, it is about photography’s position in an interconnected world, which no longer seems to contain unrelated, disconnected objects, and instead feels more interrelated and than ever. It’s about the photograph and photography’s position within a contemporary perception of reality.  And as such, we should investigate whether there is something other than ecological virtuousness or best marketing practice underpinning the illustration-only issue of Vogue Italia.
  7. Barad and Deleuze each reject notions of dual reality planes, one represented and one waiting be represented (2007: 46); there is no Utopia or Hades, forms vs. reality is a distraction, mind and body are one. Barad condemns the ‘Cartesian habit of mind’ (ibid: 49) which reinforces such dualistic interpretations of reality. Deleuze critiques Plato and his cave. Subject-object distinction is fatally undermined by Bohr’s quantum philosophy, says Barad, as it ‘exposes a fundamental failure of representationalism’ which is explored in more detail in the next section. (2007: ??
  8. Segmentarity becomes fluidity Chapter 4In The Condition of Post Modernity, David Harvey describes the period after WWI when Modernity often expressed its idealistic hope in ‘machine-living’ (1989: 32). Deleuze and Guattari relied on the collective image of the machine, of segmented parts with interconnected possibilities. Segmentarity is a foreshadowing of intra-activity. In A Thousand Plateaus, they describe two types of segmentarity, one flexible, more readily associated with what they refer to as primitive social groups, a word they are evidently uncomfortable with, indicated by the inclusion of ‘so-called’. The opposite, rigid segmentarity, refers to the structural nature of modern state-societies (2012: 246). They suggest both these and other structural configurations are ‘entangled’ and ‘inseparable’. (ibid: 247)  We people, our machines, our institutions and social structures are interconnected. The pair includes Fernand Léger’s Men in Cities (1919) at the beginning of the section about segmentarity. It has similar structural implications to other cubists, namely Georges Braque whose Violin and Candlestick seemed reminiscent of experiments I made using an old film purchased from eBay and which I have, after further development, made into a fragment of matter and meaning, called When Tom shot Penelope, his perfect wife and their kids in 1971 to include my body of work.Figure 1 Men in the City (1919) is included at the top of Chapter 9, 1933: Micropolitics and Segmentarity by Deleuze and Guattari, in A Thousand Plateaus (2012)Figure 2 ‘When Tom shot Penelope, his perfect wife and their kids in 1971’: made by buying an old film from eBay, taking screenshots, then put through a Processing code to make a montaged moving image of overlaid entanglements which have also been stored as single frames, a selection of which I extracted for the book element of my body of work.

    We might compare the sense of their segmentarity so clearly defined in Cubist painting with the grotesque fluidity evident in Klingemann’s AI renderings, where there are no segmented lines between fragments With that in mind, we may ask, is photography the ultimate expression of a dualistic Western mind-set? Could photography with its ‘negative and positive’ only have emerged from a Cartesian habit of mind, which itself didn’t appear out of a vacuum, but was predicated on hundreds of years of dualistic culture, expressed in Plato’s forms vs. reality – illustrated in his cave, and which only allows for ‘true or false, winner and loser?’ (Baggini, 2018)

    Or is binary code, behind so many photographs today, its ultimate expression: if so, it is ironic that that dualistic code has come at the same time as unprecedented levels of fluidity., only a morass of weirdly formed data, of intra-active malleable elements. Furthermore, his work overrides the photograph’s denial of fluidity and connectivity, and its insistence of fixedness.

    Deleuze and Guattari’s response to the dominant ‘belief in ‘linear progress, absolute truths, and rational planning of ideal social orders, under standardised conditions of knowledge and productions’ (Harvey, 1989: 35) seems, understandably, not to fully envisage the utter fluidity of a post digital-explosion world. They are, however, adamant that one form of segmentarity is no better or worse than another (Adkin, 2015: loc 2594) which we would do well to take on board. And while they do of course begin to reference the digitised eye, and their term ‘flow’ appears to precede the fluidity of data: word segmentarity does not convey the sheer level of mutability allowed by coded data.

    Photography, segmentarity – and then the algorithm

    Although The Family of Man exhibition was meant to be a representation of holistic reconstruction and oneness – from a fragmented society to one more interconnected, the photographs maintain and reinforce evident top-down, boundaried, structural division – segmented. Today, in a different context, where some in the West have embarked on a long-overdue examination of the crimes and repercussions of Colonialism, The Family of Man is heavily critiqued for its, at best, unsophisticated, representation of non-western people, and at worst racist, colonial outlook. Although the fluidity we witness today can at times seem impossible, it is worth considering how it might be completely necessary in order to overhaul the categorisations intrinsic in our language, institutions and structural reality.

  9. Daniel Palmer ends his essay Camera, Lights, Algorithm by explaining how photography continues to be relevant, however, ‘the traditional single-authored logic has been supplanted’. (2014: 160). For Azoulay (2018) and McGregor (2013), the hero-photographer and the decisive moment is no longer viable as it is based on misconception or been usurped by animated technologies. Intra-active entanglement of time, individuals, and concepts not only better reflect the reality in which we exist, these types of mutable assemblages are the reality in terms of how images are made today, not to mention a more responsible way of understanding events. Alain Jain’s title, ‘Everything Connects to Everything  (2018) sums up this paradigm. When we looked at Edgar Martins and Lisa Barnard, we were exploring artists who have taken this on board, using photography as their medium but refusing its fixity: expressing entanglement within structural design and by overturning traditional conventions (mixing archived and original images, for instance). The projects are dynamic, contextualised, and flexible. They manage to convey a sense of intra-activeness and becoming by utilising technological possibilities in Barnard’s case, such as the website – golddepositary.com – and a rejection of linear coherence in both, rather than giving in to the medium’s tyrannical sense of representationalism. 

 

 

 

 

[1] ‘Discourse is not a synonym for language.24 Discourse does not refer to linguistic or signifying systems, grammars, speech acts, or conversations. To think of discourse as mere spoken or written words forming descriptive statements is to enact the mistake of representationalist thinking. Discourse is not what is said; it is that which constrains and enables what can be said. Discursive practices define what counts as meaningful statements. Statements are not the mere utterances of the originating consciousness of a unified subject; rather, statements and subjects emerge from a field of possibilities.’ (Barad, 2003: 819)

 

CS A4: notes re bibliography

Yesterday I submitted an iteration of the essay knowing I had a great deal still to do. That includes:

  • Figure out a consistent way of dating people I refer to. If they’re dead I should make sure everyone has DOB and DOD in brackets next to their names. Only some have that at the moment.
  • But what about people who are alive? Not everyone’s DOB is available? So should I just not include this convention for those who are alive? What’s the rule on this?
  • I went through citations this morning listing everyone mentioned so I can double-check the bibliography- I reckon I’ll need a day set aside to make sure it’s absolutely accurate – far from it right now.
  • I’ll need to be certain of secondary citations too.
  • Look for sloppy sentences – have identified some which need editing to say what I mean more accurately ie change unconscious to preconscious re Klingemann

Any advice from anyone who knows for sure about dating people would be welcome.

I almost changed the title to The Case Against Representationalism but switched back to its current one. I think it’s more accurate. However, I will discuss that with my tutor.

List of names to double check against bibliography after reading through this morning

Still feeling it’s far too big a topic for 5000 words but it nevertheless feels such an important thing to be investigating and talking about that maybe that outweighs the inadequate space/length.

CS A4: Draft extended essay

The essay below is a draft online version. It does not contain all the images I’ve referenced. In some cases, I have not yet approached the artists for permission and in others, I am still waiting for a response.

There are some formatting things that will need to be resolved as well as the following:

  1. I need to address the backward page numbering in the contents and pre intro section – please ignore that peculiarity for now.
  2. My bibliography is not up to date – I need to double-check it.
  3. I will take a very careful look at the Harvard referencing document before submission. I can’t be sure it’s all as it should be right now.
  4. I will add more of my own BOW as it develops
  5. I need to think about the images I have used some more and also if other images might be worth including earlier and later
  6. I have of course noticed mistakes with names and sentence structure since posting. Including Bernard instead of Barnard – which I was so careful to get right but clearly failed! (fixed now)

Draft PDF (sans some images):

Without (c) images 8 March – CS A4 The photograph and photography in the age of entanglement

OCA reflection 

1. Demonstration of subject knowledge based on understanding

I feel compelled to qualify the whole thing by saying…”I think this is what Barad is telling us, but there is always the chance I have got it spectacularly wrong”. I have taken a big gulp at the beginning of every stage and thought I have bitten off far more than I can chew. A physicist read the plan and draft submission (A3) and confirmed nothing was embarrassingly wrong. I have had to work very hard to understand Barad’s and Deleuze’s ideas and have a long way to go before being fluent in either – I am also constantly adding or adjusting sentences to be more accurate every time I grasp something a little more deeply. Saying all that, I suspect the demonstration of knowledge for this level is of a high standard.

  1. Demonstration of research skills

I hope I have demonstrated an ability to explore beyond photography and to connect the work to it. I made use of a wide variety of sources – videos, books, exhibitions, discussions, emails to academics to clarify things (some of whom are generous with their time and answers, some of whom aren’t). I feel like I have kept hold of everything by the skin of my teeth, sometimes accessing old blogs and copying what I wrote into the essay before refining.

You can see much of my research on my blog or on the Sketchbook blog linked to it when topics were slightly less related. I need to go through everything in the essay with a fine-toothed comb and the Harvard guidelines to make sure everything is as it should be before submission, including all references listed. (I know some are missing.)

  1. Demonstration of critical and evaluation skills

This is always the hardest part – not made any easier by the opaque language many academics use, which makes it challenging to learn from them. However, I hope I have critiqued the work I’ve included using the terms I introduced adequately.

  1. Communication

The topic cannot be addressed in 5000+ words. I know that now. But there is a structural problem too. It’s entangled and rhizome-like but the conventions we use for essay writing are linear and top-down. This is probably a good way of describing the present paradigm – code (if I understood this correctly when doing a Processing course) enables a networked, dynamic reality but is contained within a structure based on Cartesian coordinates. What we seem to have ended up with is overwhelming internal tension compromising the structure within which we frame our reality – I expect that sentence could do with going into the essay but it would require explaining and I already need to shave about 750 words. However, I do plan to leave this alone and revisit in a few weeks after working on BOW A4. I will also put the essay through a more robust AI programme to clean up sentences etc. at that point.

CA A4: Peer Feedback (i)

Having written several drafts of the extended essay, I sent iteration nine to a limited number of students last week, mostly to people who have written one themselves although not exclusively. The feedback was excellent and helpful and I made some changes based on suggestions. I will share the essay more widely now and welcome any comments – although won’t be making any adjustments for a few weeks as I need to let it rest and look with fresh eyes after returning to BOW (except for changing mad malapropisms that might be identified, or very obvious typos/editing hangovers)

Feedback:


Firstly, an exceptionally well researched and thought out essay.  I feel somewhat inadequate to comment on it.  However, it reads well and the arguments are well made and substantiated.  There are a few instances where you use the first person singular and I would not, but I know you like that and today it seems to be quite acceptable in academic writing.  As a general feeling I would say that the first 2/3rds seemed better than the last 1/3rd, but that is just a feeling and no more.  There are a couple of small things in ‘Track Changes’ that I was not sure of.
A couple of other thoughts,
  • An abstract will help as it will succinctly provide the reader with a thread they can hold onto as they read.  I feel this is necessary as you are discussing a difficult concept for most of us and we need that stability.
  • I cannot recall who your CS tutor is and wonder if they are really well qualified to comment other than on structure etc.  I am not sure of the OCA rules, but this essay could be published in a journal where it would be peer reviewed by qualified persons.  Something you should consider.  You may have to make some modifications but the bulk of it is there.
In terms of referencing, the only comment I can make is that where you have:
: Carlo Rovelli writes in Reality is Not What it Seems, ‘Our culture is foolish to keep science and poetry separated: they are two tools to open our eyes to the beauty and complexity of the world’ (2017: 88).
you need to place the citation directly are the surname as:
: Carlo Rovelli (2017: 88)  writes in Reality is Not What it Seems, ‘Our culture is foolish to keep science and poetry separated: they are two tools to open our eyes to the beauty and complexity of the world’.
There are quite a lot of instances like this.
Finally, make sure you are OK on word count – I did a global check 8920, but not subtracting all the references etc.

I’ve read it – quickly and without the level of attention it deserves, and would be required to ‘critique’ – and I don’t think you need to be in any way reticent about sharing it more widely. It is intelligent, well-informed and interesting – dense, yes, as befits an essay at this level and at this stage, but readable. We usually talk about form matching content in the context of works of art, but it applies to your essay – inevitably. It is ‘entangled’ – as befits its subject matter – but I think you have managed, heroically (!Emoji), to hang on, by your fingertips, to a sense of of focus and direction – well done, it can’t have been easy. And I think I would only caution against too much temptation to overly amend between Assignment Four and the final version. It would be easy to be tempted – but I would rely on tutor feedback to guide you how far to go.
So – I wanted to read it, because I thought it would be interesting, and it was. I can relate it to my own work, too, which is useful. I say again, ‘well done’.

[reading this] is like riding a tiger, but I think I just about stayed on!
It’s an exceptionally complicated subject and yet I think you do manage to keep a hold on it (I only say ’think’ as I’m assuming that I understood as much as as I really did…), so big well done there. You might get assessors who know less about the subject than you now do, so hopefully that will make them err on the side of favourability rather than marking you down for their own lack knowledge on quantum… things.
I do have some notes, mostly typographical but a couple on content. I’ll refer to page numbers below but be aware that I opened a Word doc in Pages and so page numbering might have gone a bit screwy. If in doubt, search for the text string…
  • 6: “Let it be not, this is essay…”
  • 7: “from the last century”
  • 7: “the sciences have been just as, if not, guiltier” is better as “the sciences have been just as, if not more, guilty”
  • 16: “ponders out our place in reality”
  • 17: “as Susan Sontag tells us”
  • 25: you first use “rhizome” three sentences before you describe it – I think it needs a definition on first use
  • 29: “out of space” = “outer space”?
  • 32: On Photography was published in 1977 not 1971
  • 41: “Michael Fried based his book 2008 book
  • 42: “even if it id is lacking”
  • 44: “un/define” should be “undefine”
  • 45: “its still speaking with like the child it was”
  • Overall comment: don’t chop it down at this draft but I suspect it might be a tad too long and will need a nip and a tuck for the final version
  • My tutor highly recommended a three-part structure to the main body of an essay of this length and at this level, where you have four chapters. I don’t think you need to chop out a whole chapter but have a think about whether the contents of Chapter 4 could be split across the end of Chapter 3 and the start of your Conclusion (which is shorter than I expected)

There was another student who sent me some valuable comments in the word doc some of which I incorporated, others I had to dismiss as I cut words and they became non-applicable but I will revisit these again when I return to the work in a few weeks’ time. This person also queried the comments made about citations in the first comment above. I will go through the UCA Harvard file and my final draft with a fine-toothed comb.

 

Well-written and argued but I’m wondering if there are too many quotes and there needs to be more on photography – it’s difficult as a general reader with a small amount of understanding of quantum mechanics  Do you have a scientist friend who could read it and confirm the ‘science’ and also say if your photography examples are in-line with the science, i.e. does your essay give them more understanding of how far approaches to photography are changing in response to these scientific theories?

I agree with xxx re the final third – it seemed as if you were moving on to a different subject so perhaps there’s a clearer way to link it in.

and then

I enjoyed reading the re-vamp – also I realised that I was understanding it much more quickly than before so it shows the value of spending some time to absorb new concepts and words.  I think you’ve done brilliantly to get it into shape and connect the concepts so well with photography.


Clearly too long, but that isn’t an issue at this stage – just about the edit, much of that will come from guidance from your tutor.
Despite its length, I did feel it was cramped, there’s a lot of (very) interesting things going on, much of it applicable to my own work and research – unsurprisingly. However I feel it needs to be pared down, both in the scope of the ideas and also the references. Wendy once remarked to me about “footnotes” suggesting “don’t make them too long or have too many things going on in them – I paraphrase! Suggesting that it could appear to be showing off, though if anything, in your case, it might suggest the opposite!
I found that the lengthier sections with your words – without interruption, were the most interesting, where your ideas came to the fore rather than being subordinated by the – admittedly – difficult theories. And that’s where I think the paring will end up – removing some of the references so that the reader can focus on your voice, with a refinement of the broad range of considerations around the main subject. As my current theory tutor says – focus! (maybe I’ve been as guilty 😉 ).
Also there is are passages where the reader is invited to listen to both the personal – almost first person – before being carried back into a third person.

It’s much easier to absorb on the second reading!! I agree with the general view that you’ve managed to collate some complex concepts into a coherent argument but probably feel that there is another cut or two to remove some of the more anecdotal and peripheral bits which I think slightly confuse the objective of the essay and it’s critical journey – when you do so much reading and research it becomes a labour of love and a challenge to leave bits out but that’s the importance of editing I suppose. Like Stan says, I’m sure your tutor is best to advise. The conclusion I understood completely first time around which prompted me to start reading the essay again to see what I’d missed / misunderstood.
I think this area of non-linear representation is really really interesting so I’m looking upon this as a real learning opportunity and it’s quite enjoyable to read. I’ll reserve the right to come back with more once I’ve completed read 2!

 


This is a mammoth task and, as you say, the scope is slightly too large for the course requirement. But I did understand and was engaged by what you were saying. The conclusion is especially strong and the examples too.
Are you leaning too heavily on Barad for a rounded critical viewpoint on the topic? I wonder if looking at some other new materialists / relevant theorists like Jane Bennett, Bruno LaTour, Diane Coole might add something? Although that takes us back to the scope. Perhaps the title (or subtitle) needs to locate the focus in Barad?
I also wondered if you had this:
Dolphijn & van der Tuin, ‘New Materialism: Interviews & Cartographies’
If not, I can send it to you if you like.
Another one was John Searle’s ‘The Construction of Social Reality’ – it feels like a key background text and maybe you have already read it. In particular, his take on function (mostly ch1 &2).
I really like the first person approach and your reasoning behind it, but there are sections which are too anecdotal and take away from the more academic work you have done. e.g. p8 ‘Another viewer…’ I don’t think this is appropriate evidence for this kind of writing.
It does need a really good proof and it still a little bit dense in parts. I wonder if you have anyone who hasn’t read it before, who will be able to tell you whether it is accessible to a more general audience?
This might also be of interest to you: https://newmaterialism.eu/
Followed by:
On further readings and reflections, it’s probably not worth diluting the work with other new materialists – although I think you would enjoy LaTour. The first section just needs rewriting to bring it up to the standard of the rest. Obviously you are completely free to ignore me, but I would give each paragraph a title, pull out only those sentences and quotes that are really strong, then put the lot on slips of paper, shuffle them around and begin rewriting in mostly your own words.

Found this whilst googling some words that I did n’t understand! Don’t know whether you’ve already seen it or it’s completely irrelevant but saw the name Barad!!

http://eprints.lse.ac.uk/57600/1/Scott_exploring_material.pdf

It’s much easier to absorb on the second reading!! I agree with the general view that you’ve managed to collate some complex concepts into a coherent argument but probably feel that there is another cut or two to remove some of the more anecdotal and peripheral bits which I think slightly confuse the objective of the essay and it’s critical journey – when you do so much reading and research it becomes a labour of love and a challenge to leave bits out but that’s the importance of editing I suppose. Like Stan says, I’m sure your tutor is best to advise. The conclusion I understood completely first time around which prompted me to start reading the essay again to see what I’d missed / misunderstood.
I think this area of non-linear representation is really really interesting so I’m looking upon this as a real learning opportunity and it’s quite enjoyable to read. I’ll reserve the right to come back with more once I’ve completed read 2!

CS A4: research Deleuze

In order to concentrate on BOW I had to remove myself temporarily from the CS module – still keeping one foot in obviously as both are informing each other – but now climbing back into it is taking a bit of time/space. I’ve just started reading Baggini’s How the World Thinks (2018) but I need to head back to Barad and also start delving into Deleuze esp. Difference and Repetition (1968). The video below is an excellent introduction. Interesting to compare with Barad.

 

Difference / diffraction

Rhizome / entanglement

The virtual by Deleuze is described in the same terms as Barad and other quantum people.

https://images.app.goo.gl/uYqeqcZdYqw92LkT6

Several useful YouTube vids and podcasts – weird that Barad doesn’t refer to Deleuze more

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R8DTBWaUqYo

https://podcasts.apple.com/gb/podcast/the-partially-examined-life/id318345767?i=1000159329268 (English guy’s comments useful – if (Life Not School Digest 23 Jan 2013))

Medium post with several podcasts, Philosophize This, John David Ebert, Todd May

CS: Alan Sekula’s The Body and the Archive part 1

Sekula, A. (1986) ‘The Body and the Archive’ In: October 39 p.3064. At: http://chnm.gmu.edu/courses/magic/sekula.pdf (Accessed 23/11/2019).

Field, S. (2017) Notes: The Body and the Archive Allan Sekula. WordPress [Blog] At: https://ocasjf.wordpress.com/2017/06/12/notes-the-body-and-the-archive-allan-sekula/ (Accessed 05/01/2020).
Heimans, J. and Timms, H. (2018) New power: how it’s changing the 21st century – and why you need to know. (Kindle) London: Macmillan.
Blatt, Ari J. 2009 ‘The interphototextual dimension of Annie Ernaux and Marc Marie’s L’usage de la photo‘, Word & Image, 25: 1, 46 — 55, 27 – Alain Fleischer, Mummy, mummies (Lagrasse: E ́ ditions Verdier, 2002), pp. 15–16. Translations mine. (Blatt) Available at: https://www.tcd.ie/French/assets/doc/BlattOnErnauxMarie.pdf [Accessed: 24/04/2018]
Quantum Fields: The Real Building Blocks of the Universe – with David Tong (2017) In: The Royal Institution. Royal Institute. At: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zNVQfWC_evg (Accessed 05/01/2020).

I looked at this essay during S&O and will look at it again here – Sekula’s essay along with John Tagg’s talk on the filing cabinet both provide plenty of useful references, which, combined with Barad, Lupton and Rubenstein’s thoughts/thesis’, are probably the key sources of information through which I’ll explore at the topic I’ve chosen.

  • The essay opens with the paradoxical status of photography in bourgeois culture (3)
  • He quotes a song which ‘plays on the possibility of a technological outpacing of already expanding cultural institutions’. (4) This rings true today (see New Power, (Heimans and Timms, 2018))
  • You could replace the work photography with digital for the first two pages and it would all sound relevant and fair.
  • However, by page 6, the veracity of the photography is being discussed, as seen by contemporaries – ‘Only the photograph could begin to claim the legal status of a visual document of ownership’
  • ‘a silence that silences’ (See muteness and photography – ‘Ernaux reminds us, initially ‘all photos are mute’’ (p.73).) Blatt, Ari J.(2009))
  • (6) ‘the criminal body’ and therefore the ‘social body’ invented
  • ‘a system of representation capable of functioning honorifically and repressively’ (6) how does this work with representationalism and the unpicking of that? There are no entities waiting somewhere to be represented, rather there are emergent intra-active phenomena (Barad, 2007) (criminal and social bodies are made/formed)
  • again photography can be replaced with digitisation when discussing how portraits are degraded and extended at the same time – see selfies, phone pics
  • (7) ‘Photography came to establish and delimit the terrain of the other, to define both the generalised look – the typology – and the contingent instance of deviance and social pathology.’ So much to say here – See Azoulay (2019) and photography’s intra-active position/role within a much wider non-linear narrative. See Tagg and ‘fixity’ of the photography and Victorian culture – the desire to catalogue everything according to ordered and identifiable rules, (2011) i.e. the periodic table of elements  – a Victorian System compared to today’s quantum fields, a modern system/model of reality which we are informed in most accurate to date and is far more nebulous and difficult to comprehend, no doubt in part due to our Cartesian ‘habit of mind’ which is desperate to label and file everything neatly and ordered (Barad, 2007) as well as being counter-intuitive, shrouded in academic mystery and just really impossibly hard. The Victorian system and hence our dominant one (although this is changing hence the entrenched reaction of a conservative mindset), seems desperately naive in comparison.
  • (7) See quote about ‘possessive individualism’ which I’ve already inserted into CSA2
  • (7) Relate photography ‘a means of cultural enlightenment’ and ‘sustained sentimental ties in a nation of migrants’  – compare this to digital tech/culture in today’s culture. Beneath both Carlyle and Aurelias Root’s comments is a dreadful patronising tone however which is surely avoidable. See images ‘of the great’ = ‘moral exemplars’ ??? (Imagine a photograph of any of our current crop of erstwhile leaders providing such?)
  • Sekula writes of the utilitarian social machine, the Panopticon – think today of social media/ Surveillance Capitalism (Zuboff, 2016) (9)
  • The archived body – ‘begins’ here see page (10) begins is not the right word, becomes visible perhaps.
  • 911) physiognomy and phrenology  – ‘surface of the body’ ‘bore the outward signs of the inner character’  – Compare this to Professor Plomins deterministic genetic code thesis which Cummings et al relied upon to justify changes they made to the Education system. Cummings claims that people misunderstood the work and have since retracted their negative comments. However, I think Christakis’ comments on genetic coding is probably more honest  – both I suspect, however, show how deep and far-reaching social construction and their associated embedded epigenetic markers can be. Whereas some can see the need for more positive and profound structural changes to take place, there is a mindset which believes we should further entrench these realities which Sekula is talking about that continue today. I was also struck while reading this by the similarities in an article I read today some on FB (I think) which claimed the more bitter and cynical you are, the more likely you are to age quickly and get sick. Lots of scientific data support the thesis – the way it’s been framed, but I am quite cynical indeed and look about fifteen years younger than some of my friends  – so I felt a little doubtful  – we people seem to enjoy deterministic narratives even today.
  • (11) borne of ‘attempts to construct a materialist science’  – compare to Barad’s performative/discursive/material emergence of meaning, far more complex and lively but nebulous so hard for people to engage with
  • Maybe time to revisit Szondi who I discussed in my first reflection about this essay – an early psychometric tester, he defined people by their reactions to faces rather than by the shape of their own faces/heads. Many companies today use much more robust psychometric tests which are extremely powerful but one wonders about the wonderful aspect of chance being eliminated. And so we enter the discussion of AI and how it can be so much more accurate than human power but how much agency do we give it? Currently watching Travelers (Netflix) which explores this in typical pop-culture fashion – first series better than then the rest and lots of references to .
  • Sekula identified ‘idealist secret lurking a the heart of the putatively materialist sciences’ – how is the AI screening of CVs and psychometric testing any different? And you should see the John Lewis video that you must watch before taking thier tests   – madly idealist in quite a scary way, reminded me of Logan’s Run (In HR terms, humans do still get involved: I know this as AI testing identified me as potentially suitable for a well-paid relatively high-status job but my lack of experience ensured I was rejected once a human looked at my CV in one particular application process!) Perhaps I will include some of the resulting descriptions of me, having taken part in this process in my BOW… 
  • TBC