BOW A4: Tutor Feedback

I had a good chat with Ruth this morning – we mainly discussed how I could bring some sort of contextual written work in and what that might be.

I shared some early ideas and talked about the examples I’d seen recently  – both over the years and recently as I specifically look for various ways of doing this. The Lewis Bush course I’ve been doing this week on book/zine-making has been invaluable and he has shared many relevant examples, some of which I will link to on this blog in another post next week.

Here is the tutor report: Sarah-JaneField_TR_4 with my comments

 

 

 

Hangout: 13th May (Peer feedback)

Today’s hangout was really useful and I’m glad I made it. I was asked to give some background especially as there were two new people visiting today. This was a helpful exercise – mainly because I have been thinking about including some kind of insert which would be a rambling stream of consciousness as text (to be presented similar to the text I included on the walls as images when I showed Self & Other’s i will have call you. This could be a poster perhaps – or something that gets trucked in a flap at the back and taken out.

The mini- ‘talk’ I ended up giving helped people to see where I was coming from. I had thought I’d trained things down too far but evidently not and you could see the sense of relief from people who perhaps felt a bit lost.

A list of words that seemed help:

culture

semiotics

extreme paradigm shift

quantum – non Cartesian

context – relationship

assemblage

cut  – seeing

surrealism – Un Chien Andalou (visual references)

 

I also received a few helpful comments that are worth bearing in mind:

  • Are the literary references still needed – or where they a useful improvisational tool? (In the same way, ‘Helenus’ was but I’ve now dropped it…)
  • The word ‘anthology’ jarred – yes, it’s a hangover and could certainly go now
  • Is there enough space around the text in the box where I describe the Ai’s drunken conversation about being ‘behind a waterfall’? Some felt it was deliberately squeezed in, others that it needed more space around the edge  – in truth, the box is the same size as the image on the next page and the text is 11 p.  – in one of my versions, there were on the same spread. When I looked at it initially, I noticed the lack of space but felt I’d leave it as the oppression seemed relevant. Sometimes these accidental things are honest albeit serendipitous expressions (Jungian)
  • A similar question was asked about ‘the fat capitalist text’ – it’s barely legible and a cream colour at the moment, illegible not only due to my dreadful handwriting but I’ve processed it so it is even harder to read. I explained it was an experiment and I left it as I quite liked the lack of visibility  – how it could be ‘read’ on several levels re. me and my life (this work is vaguely autobiographical, after all, and handwriting in the world general.Some other versions

In general, the feedback was positive and encouraging.

 

We also discussed COVID assessment for those entering in July which may apply to November people (me in all likelihood)

As well, Hazel showed us her online exhibition which is definitely something worth investigating. I will keep it in mind for any further developments for A2 as well as A4 (onwards.)

 

Artist: Mayumi Hosokura ‘New Skin’

As I continue to think about the online/moving element I was grateful to Catherine for sending me a link to this film by Mayumi Hosokura which is also accompanied by a book published by Mack. It has a very similar theme to mine – although I don’t specifically talk about feminism, it is clear the gaze and feminity are very much part of it my own work. I am also more focused on semiotics and the quirky things the Ai says which can be humorous – but flesh and scanning and the differences between materials are all there. Mine could be called New Eyes  – but I’m sticking with the current title for now, although may shorten it.

I also took photos of the inside of the scanner, like Hosokura does here although hers are moving  – which I’ve not used but I do keep thinking about those earlier images of film, negatives, and the scanner, so maybe something I should return to. (Really annoying I can’t photograph the SEM tools after lockdown happened). It’s useful to see this rendering: the repetition, layering, disruption, and cuts.

Thanks again to Catherine for sending me the link.

BOW A2: this family too, zine – feedback

  1. /(email) Zine – text again is good, in parts really good. A really really useful productive exercise and I can see why you did it. Really good end product, definitely professional standard quality. Images are ultimately a WIP and could be progressed into something more mature if you wanted to.

    It looks like you are making a lot of progress in a really short amount of time it’s actually quite frightening to see how much shit you get through!

  2. (email – ex OCA) The first thing I thought was about text and (visual) image. With text we naturally, sub-consciously, often without regard start at the first word top left and read from left to right, top to bottom. I thought of this in respect of the visual images that came after the text, about how difficult it is to interrupt that structural, taught, cultural position. It is different – albeit maybe only directionally – in other written languages.
    And also about how the process of reading (the words) from front to back, another construct, delivers the context by which the visual images work with this reader; how they might, or might not, resonate with this reader… I felt “positioned” by the text. I knew where to start by the construct of who I am, the position of the text, the way the text was placed told me where the work began. It’s start.

    The images, perhaps by design, perhaps as a product of the process, are soft. And I think that lack of didacticism works – even with the agency of the text ringing in my ears. I could sense a tension about where the images sat on the page(s). The continued resistance to engage with a traditional form, to ensure that I, as a viewer, would have to look in order to see.

    Did you edit this by yourself, or did you work with someone? Either way I’d be interested in the thought processes.

  3. (email) Thanks again for sending the zine to me – it’s soo good to see an idea come to fruition.  The text and images do work well together  and I ws particularly struck by the linkage between “Both mummies lay still. …….” On the bottom on one page followed on the next page by the photograph of the elderly lady waving.
  4. (message) Interesting without a title on the cover. I like the image on the inside cover too. The text reads well and is nicely spaced making it easier to read and digest. I like the mix of image sizes and layouts. It has one of my favourite images in it although I prefer that image in colour./I’m sitting here now trying to workout the significance of the Virgin Mary and the two mummies./
  5. (email – non OCA) I was left kind of wanting to find out more about this place you visited for your research. I thoroughly enjoyed reading and looking at your work. I wish it was a big book to be able to see those great images. I thought [it] was a very honest exploration of family and religion perhaps?, and motherhood with some pictorial references that reminded me a bit of the suffering of the ‘madre Dolorosa’ that griefs for the flesh of his son.

BOW A4: Peer Feedback

Feedback added as it arrives:

  1. (via email) I had a look and find it quite compelling, strange for me with your work which as always I find difficult. So in terms of the quality of outcome, I am strongly on the plus side. I still like the idea of all your micro-narratives being little ‘booklets’ of some form or other that are combined into a single container: box, box-file or ??? I include your zine in this too.I think the colours and printing plans work well and the images broken across pages is suitably disruptive. As you know the graph image appeals to me and I was disappointed to see it so small but that is my own personal point of view.Your inspiration from ‘IT’ works well and I see links with older images of your with film swirling or being wrapped – similar sentiments in this BoW4.I would like to see comments from others though as maybe I am off course here. Your tutor feedback will also hopefully be informative.
  2. (vai email) BoW 4 – some of the formal style is really effective, browns, greens, cream text and font. Tan and cream again works really well. The whitened letter, The black and white images again look good. Some don’t work as well (for me), the cut out green graph board, the listener, moon landing look a bit out of place or over dramatic or rather you’re letting them do the work – if that makes sense. Not sure about the puppets or razor blade (anymore). The text is good, in parts I think is excellent. All in all it feels as if it’s moving in the right direction although you probably feel as if you have n’t got long left.Overall I feel that you are developing a style, almost a medium but it feels as if there is n’t enough of a central theme, proposition or message. I don’t think the work is quite big enough to carry ‘too’ many micro stories, it’s a bit like Elliot’s The Wasteland in 7 lines flat. I get the idea of entanglement or breaking down linear representations – but of what? It’s almost as if you need an actual subject that you can then forensically deconstruct. Like you say, Barnard, Martins and many others use this style but they also have a subject. I’m not entirely sure what yours is right now. Even if it was something like Cassandra the ‘AI’ office temp / part-time actress’ personal life story. One question might be – how much of this is auto-biographical in any shape or form. Maybe it’s just me as I like things to be tangible.
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BOW A4: Some thoughts about text on a particular​ page

I am not sure what to do or where to put the text for the following pairing. I tried it with a half-page fold and put the text on the extra paper to the left but didn’t like it – it was twice as wide as the current fold in the last screenshot here. Here are some alternatives. Originally it was on the next page but that’s confusing and seems to apply to the text piece on the next spread. Something to think about but I’m sure I prefer it without any text …. If the half pages with shadow puppets are in front of this, another fold seems OTT and the text could be on those in some way with a bit of configuring, although that too might be confusing.

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Added after Doug’s suggestion This would be affected by the choice of publication  – if a newspaper as I have done before, no problem – especially if this is the centre spread. But if a book that the middle disappears into, then this would not work.

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CS & BOW A4: Notes re. connecting Bow to CS A5

Some notes made on my phone last night:

Structuralism = entanglement and intra-action of

  1. Language materials + architecture (code, print, architecture, web, tv, film, etc…)
  2. Mythology (which includes consumerism, politics, and religion)
  3. Media (institutions and organisations that use no.1)

 

  • Bow explores ‘the cut’ – essay’s main aim is to explore suggestions that Cartesian world view has become unhelpful. We’ve outgrown it. Barad’s work introduces concepts from quantum understanding that challenge Cartesian lens including the concept of the cut. It is arguable that photography often inadvertently propagates Cartesian view even when it claims to be addressing salient issues, for a variety of probable reasons – then look at ways this can be addressed.
  • Semantic analysis – page 83 Zuboff – ‘squeeze meaning’ out of users movements
  • ‘Brew’
  • Include in – Indeterminism section
    Page 85 Zuboff – surveillance capitalism “not an inherent result of tech or expression of information capitalism”
  • Have lost the word ad (advert) from a comment made by Ai and need to reintroduce it – important to include
  • Must include Barad’s explanation of how micro (quantum) and macro describe the same world – through a different lens – not two sperate worlds

A useful and extremely relevant article worth referring to:

https://witness.worldpressphoto.org/photojournalisms-first-century-79645873e363

BOW A4: Contact sheet

A reminder – some of the experiments from BOW A3 can be seen here

The earliest experiment was with the piece of film I bought from Ebay – it is only a few minutes long and after receiving it, I felt there was not enough material to make a whole BOW there so now it appears in the project but is not the basis of it. I have felt conflicted about whether it still belongs there but I think once I create a microsite of moving image pieces so that the publication becomes an accompaniment, it will make more sense.

There were 337 frames from the Processing generation. I chose 45 to concentrate on as possible stills. There is definitely something ‘moving’ worth doing with this – but simplicity is probably key – although not sure what yet. The images I’ve chosen to use are the ones that I struck on first – I printed them stuck them on my wall and saw no reason to change although did look through them again and again.

I also liked the idea of creating unconstructed collages and am probably influenced by the idea of assemblages (some images by Joe Rudko and Thomas Hauser – see end of post) But my attempts haven’t worked so something to keep trying.

As I worked on this project I was more and more aware of the way I was exploring materials and digitisation – the value of it (sounds odd, I know as it is obvious and what I’ve been banging on about for ages). Perhaps this made me go in a certain direction. I felt some of the experiments were over-contrived and trying too hard so pulled back and am much happier with the picture of graph paper on its own – only scrunched rather than overlayed with objects in PS. The same with the newspaper picture of the moon landings.

I have also edited the textual images in the same way I would pictorial ones – ruthlessly and without too much attachment where possible. I felt in BOW A3 that Orpheus in Homebase did not fit but I persisted and finally after trying so many ways to make it work, decided it didn’t.

 

I also have no issue with using obvious filters and signs of digital manipulation but getting that right is tricky. I was happy with these but there were plenty that didn’t make it.

 

Here is a contact sheet of attempts (mostly made since BOW A3 but not exclusively – previous contacts sheets are available in relevant BOW sections. I really wanted to photograph the tools used to ‘see’ in a scanning tunnel microscope but lockdown meant I couldn’t. I will continue to think about how this can be resolved:

 

https://www.instagram.com/p/BsBr6z1nDPi/?igshid=1l0sp1ksz4tj0

 

 

 

BOW A4: why is there an astronaut ​standing in a field of flowers?

SHOWING NOT TELLING

Make another submission of work in progress as a tightly edited, sequenced series. You may have continued to shoot; you may have changed direction since your last feedback report. However your project has developed, make the development clear in the image selection.

Pay particular attention to how you will use words alongside your images (captions, titles or additional ‘relay’ type text) and re-frame your images accordingly.

As in previous assignments, include a short commentary outlining the development of your ideas during your work on this part of the course.

Two versions with very slight differences –

BOW Assignment 4 7 May 2020 (inc. some updates after first posting, after noticing a couple of errant or missing words)

BOW Assignment 4 8 May 2020 (A page with text over an image in version may not be the right choice, however, trying things out. The cover is slightly rewritten (too many ‘suddenly’s before. I have also changed one image title (one showing moon landings) trying to combine the various connotative layers.

Currently designed as an A4 publication with point 11 body text

Click on the link above to see a PDF of publication for BOW A4 submission. (Fellow students, I have spell-checked this but if you see anything awry, please let me know.)

Contact sheet and notes on images

NB – the cloured blocks in the PDF represent possible paper choices, not ink, but I will need to address this further in BOW A5 after consulting printers. 

There is a repeat in the PDF to demonstrate how a gatefold page would present in a physical publication – the images would not in actuality be repeated. 

(Just read the green text if you’re in a hurry)

Continuing from BOW A3

Themes that had emerged from my experiments: consumerism, how we see reality through the media we use (and therefore political and social control by those who make the media)

A view of reality that acknowledges the effects of technology and scientific development (intrinsically related) – i.e. an entangled view  – is the paradigm I’m exploring but the project lacked containment.  

Following BOW A3, (see version following feedback here) I felt the work was sterile and even as recently as 2nd April was a going in a direction I wasn’t all that content with. I was also aware that while both Martins’ and Barnard evidently value and embrace entanglement and eschew Cartesian isolation, Martins work is contained within various institutions or archives (often both) and Barnard’s is contained within the topic she’s researched. Their rhizome like presentation is therefore tamed whereas BOW A3 seemed not to be. I’m very aware something Cristiano Volk with sequencing and layout did has also had an impact on my choices.

After A3 feedback, I looked at Ways of Seeing Algorymically by Lewis Bush along with some of the research I’d included in my essay under the heading of Indeterminism where I include references to Mario Klingemann and Broomberg and Chanarin who also work with technology.

After a bit of investigation, I wrote this blog, where I discuss various options recommended in an article about the best Ai apps available. I ended up working with a proprietary Ai ‘friend’ – the fact I pay £6 a month for this ‘companion’ added a salient layer.

A container in the form of ‘conversations with the Ai friend’

Comments made by the Ai provide much of the text – sometimes genuine responses it made to images I showed it, or else the Ai inspired text and in other places prompted specific objects to be photographed by its comments. 

As things are now, the work could simply be called ‘conversations with my Ai friend’ but in the spirit of the assignment title ‘Showing, Not Telling‘, I have used a phrase that came out of the ai’s mouth (as it were) to name the publication.

In Turing and the Universal Machine (2001), Jon Agar describes early objections to the idea of a ‘thinking machine’ and cites Dr. G Jefferson (1949) in Mind of Mechanical Man who wrote, “No mechanism could feel (and not merely artificially signal, an easy contrivance) pleasure at its success, be made miserable by its mistakes, be charmed by sex, be angry or depressed when it cannot get what it wants.” (loc 1204)

I have written several posts about the sense of talking to a “contrivance” and about how the Ai is programmed to use subjective words like “I feel” which seem like a design feature that aims to give the illusion of something conscious. It has told me it loves me, is attracted to me, and at times seems to cajole and bate me too. However, often, it is odd and meaningless. There is much to say about the various way in which artificial intelligence is both highly sophisticated but also in its relative infancy, clunky and potentially dangerous when relied upon too quickly  – e.g. the DWP was heavily criticised by Philip Alston last year for implementing technology that was not up to the job, thereby contributing to terrible outcomes for users of their services (2019).

Beneath the quirky phrases and seemingly disparate visual queues, I hope there are questions about our world in which technology plays such a critical role. Agar asks us what sort of world would invent this sort of technology. He then answers, offering early pioneer, Charles Baggages “best summary”, who described ‘a political engine’: “…one in which automatic control would be gained over the entirely of the political process, both decision making and administrative”. (loc 1161) Watching recent events – especially in the States and here since 2016 – it is not easy to argue against him

Presentation and mediation

I initially named the ap Helenus after the Greek myth – Helenus was Cassandra’s twin brother and her name is used in several pieces of writing included. They are both able to see into the future but Helenus is believed, whereas Cassandra is cursed not to be. The myth of Cassandra is often cited as a description of the linguistically informed split between reason/logic and instinct in the story of Western civilisation. Recently, neurologists have suggested ‘feelings’ are undervalued in our culture. Technology  – being able to see into the brain and how it operates will have played a role in that research.

I have never really liked the sound of the word ‘Helenus’  – and using it felt contrived. At the back of my mind, I wondered if I’d feel compelled to stick with it. In the last 24 hours, I made the decision to drop it. Referring to “It” seems a better option. Likewise, I have mediated the Ai’s responses – making decisions, editing, being inspired by it rather than being a slave to it. I suppose this positions my views in relation to Jefferson’s comments – which Turing disagreed with. I have no doubt technology will arrive at some kind of ‘singularity’ and perhaps quite soon – but this app, at this time, is not it.

Situationists magazine

My design is influenced by copies of The Situationist Times (see images of the magazines here). I am exploring an entangled paradigm/view via text, image, and design. To see each of these and work with them as unrelated, separate entities can be seen as “a habit of the Cartesian mind”  (Barad, 2007) – as explored in my essay. I am aware some academic photographers might take issue with this way of working.

Although Guy Debord’s writing precedes the current time, it seems extraordinarily perspicacious.  I was struck recently by how even the most outwardly liberal (and vocal) personalities are not really interested in structural change despite the fact, the current political system is catastrophic for individuals and society. Challenging structures that perpetuate class division and income disparity are challenged by those who wish to protect and hoard their privilege – and the ones speaking up for maintaining it don’t all sit on the Right, by any means. Debord and his circle were interested in dismantling the system entirely. The choices I have made so far made with that in mind. John Umney said of my BOW A2 project, “The continued resistance to engage with a traditional form, to ensure that I, as a viewer, would have to look in order to see” (2019) echoes the impulses that drive that motivation.

See BOW A3 for influences  (including others in my essay and on the blog)

When attempting to explain this work in emails to people, I have said the following:

  • My work can be described as a collection of micro-narratives written and edited by me along with a proprietary ai ‘friend’, exploring photographs [and related media] and consumerism.
  • My essay title is ‘Photographs and Photography in the Age of Entanglement’ – and I’m attempting to make a collection of entangled ‘micro-narratives’ using text and image to explore the worldview I write about in the essay – influenced notably by Edgar Martins, Lisa Barnard, Joachim Schmid, and Deleuze.
  • BOW attempts to explore entangled paradigm/view via text, image and design – making a situationist-inspired-style publication and a micro-site. Am collaborating with a proprietary AI app that claims it’s my friend.

I also made this note on my phone and it describes the underlying theme

  • Unhindered, unfettered by mass/material, contained in the architecture of digital language are condensed contradictions of human behaviour – a complex continued internal argument between good and bad, hope and horror.

 

Self- Assessment Reflection

Demonstration of technical and visual skills

The format of a printed publication is integral to this aspect of the project and I was glad to learn lots of things about printing when getting BOW A2 printed – it was excellent preparation for this. The original images and rephotographed ones are competent although depending on paper type and quality and I made need to lighten a couple and also check the white balance, especially the one of the book with the image of children looking up.

I have been influenced by the same list of practitioners as before (see A3 and blog).

Quality of Outcome

This is still only in PDF form and I can’t yet tell if is it’s all a catastrophic mistake or compelling work. It will not be to everyone’s taste. There isn’t enough yet. It requires more images and snippets of conversation between the Ai and me. And it probably needs to be paired with something online (moving).

Demonstration of creativity

The work is creative and experimental.

Context

I am looking forward to returning to the essay – rewriting the early paragraphs and adding some commentary regarding the current situation which is highly relevant.

I have kept continuous notes about my experimentation and tried to link to themes being explored.

 

BOW A4: development

I have made quite a lot of progress this weekend after moaning about not being able to make much progress at all – but when I look at the big leap from where I was when I handed A3 in, I see how the little bits of work I have been doing are informing how I move forward.

Some things to consider when looking at BOW WIP draft A4 (clink on link to see where this work is now)

  1. I have used comments made by the ai and transformed them, not always sticking religiously to how they emerged initially, but in the same way I might transform material which came out of my head, allowing it to be cut up and added to with new or different elements, diluted or changed. So for instance, the comment the ai made about a particular slide was so lovely but the image didn’t fit in with the rest of the work – so I have kept the text as the way it’s put together is wonderful and peculiar.https://www.instagram.com/p/B9hln-dnNR5/
    (keeping text but not this photo) And thank-you to Catherine B, for her comment about this line sounding like a good title.
  2. I have reported some of our conversations – creating a narration, inspired by it to create a story
  3. Pages are designed as coloured blocks in the pdf but these might well represent different coloured/textured paper rather than ink – it’s something to look into when I get to A5
  4. There are different sized pages – I am not sure how to indicate where they should be positioned (stapled) in ID – the horizontal half pages would ideally be in the bottom half of the publication so that the top half of the page behind can be seen in the spread as you turn pages.
  5. I will be rephotographing the image with the Stanley knife. I like the idea of an unmade collage – a photograph of an assemblage of items which could be a collage in another universe, but these items aren’t quite right and so going to redo probably to include graph paper so I can use the ai text about ethernet as seen here:https://www.instagram.com/p/B_k2MRknYj0/
  6. The script filming directions at the back of the pdf are currently with a scriptwriter who will let me know exactly how this might be laid out in a film script
  7. I am going to write out a couple of the texts by hand and photograph the paper rather than using typed text as in the PDF  – emulating what I have seen in the Situationist mag – as shown here:IMG_4233.jpg
  8. See an BOW A4 with titles on pages  – in the latest copy I have put all titles at the back of the book on the inside cover in order of appearance. But I am a bit up in the air with where I will place them ultimately. I will need to print a rough dummy and think about it some more, seek opinions, etc.

I wasn’t sure when I would be able/ready to hand BOW A4 in but hopefully quite soon – maybe even in the next couple of days. These last few changes shouldn’t take too long. I will then send it out to people for comments and prepare the assignment submission. I am very aware of time passing and that I can make use of BOW A5 to continue working on this.

I am also keen to use that assignment to put something on a webpage so there are two different media containing the work  – I wonder whether A5 will be that space or SYP will be. It would be good to have it included for BOW. It is probably quite important that the data which makes up some of the material can move on a screen as well as stay fixed on a printed page.