I have submitted the essay to Matt for final comments. I do however need to address a few issues before submitting for assessment- see below:
CS A5 Image in the age of entanglement – Submitted to MW (only images with permission or from PR)
- I need to seek permission for some images so those ones are blank in this particular online copy – Matt has the full version.
- It is still a little over word count and I will need to edit down. I will do this after giving it a rest for a couple of weeks so I can see where edit
- I will double-check the citation rules and seek advice – that kind of thing is a challenge. (I did spend an evening reading through them and hope it is nearly right).
- I’ve uploaded an interim version on the Peer Feedback page to accompany the relevant comments written up on 10/06/2020 from peers to show development.
- Finally (added a day after posting after some thought) I think I need to revisit the agential section – free will is really tricky: unconscious motivation, Pavlovian manipulation, Deleuze’s flow for example all need to be acknowledged and aren’t at the moment. This is an issue for word count – might detract from the main thread – entanglement- which I’m loath to do.
- The same goes for determinism v. Indeterminism. There are still no clear cut answers despite Barad’s arguments.
How things have changed from A4:
- I was confused about some key issues – I think I have clarified them in my own head, thanks to some advice from a friend who is far more knowledgeable than me, and hopefully, that has translated in the essay. (Also see the difference between version send to the feedback group and the version sent to Matt – it is significant).
- The essay is much more focused on entanglement along with what is needed to describe that. I think it reads better, is more accessible, but it has probably lost something in the meantime – but overall it is better now.
- I have restructured it – rather than three chapters, it has two Parts as well as an Introduction and Conclusion. I did this by adding the end of what was Chp. 3 to the conclusion. I think it works better for this length of essay.
- The essay is still and will forever be (fatally?) flawed by the fact it is too big to tackle in 5000 words (not that I think I could manage more at this time – it has been difficult to research and then manage the information).
- As challenging as it has been, I have learnt a great deal, so it was worth it
- I wish I could simply say reread certain sections but I have rewritten and restructured so much I do think it requires another full reading. However, specifically, there is a clearer opening that states the intention, – intra-action, agential realism and indeterminism have all been refined and I think the descriptions are more accurate in terms of Barad’s descriptions now. I have put a lot more of me into Part Two – I was worried it was a bit of a rant now – but hopefully, Matt will let me know if I’ve gone too far.
- I have added and taken away image examples.
- The Conclusion is longer.
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