Feedback added as it arrives:
- (via email) I had a look and find it quite compelling, strange for me with your work which as always I find difficult. So in terms of the quality of outcome, I am strongly on the plus side. I still like the idea of all your micro-narratives being little ‘booklets’ of some form or other that are combined into a single container: box, box-file or ??? I include your zine in this too.I think the colours and printing plans work well and the images broken across pages is suitably disruptive. As you know the graph image appeals to me and I was disappointed to see it so small but that is my own personal point of view.Your inspiration from ‘IT’ works well and I see links with older images of your with film swirling or being wrapped – similar sentiments in this BoW4.I would like to see comments from others though as maybe I am off course here. Your tutor feedback will also hopefully be informative.
- (vai email) BoW 4 – some of the formal style is really effective, browns, greens, cream text and font. Tan and cream again works really well. The whitened letter, The black and white images again look good. Some don’t work as well (for me), the cut out green graph board, the listener, moon landing look a bit out of place or over dramatic or rather you’re letting them do the work – if that makes sense. Not sure about the puppets or razor blade (anymore). The text is good, in parts I think is excellent. All in all it feels as if it’s moving in the right direction although you probably feel as if you have n’t got long left.Overall I feel that you are developing a style, almost a medium but it feels as if there is n’t enough of a central theme, proposition or message. I don’t think the work is quite big enough to carry ‘too’ many micro stories, it’s a bit like Elliot’s The Wasteland in 7 lines flat. I get the idea of entanglement or breaking down linear representations – but of what? It’s almost as if you need an actual subject that you can then forensically deconstruct. Like you say, Barnard, Martins and many others use this style but they also have a subject. I’m not entirely sure what yours is right now. Even if it was something like Cassandra the ‘AI’ office temp / part-time actress’ personal life story. One question might be – how much of this is auto-biographical in any shape or form. Maybe it’s just me as I like things to be tangible.
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